[차한잔]  (영어)도움을 부탁드립니다.

개인적인 일로 게시판에 부하를 드려죄송합니다,
리젠이 적은 주말을 기다렸습니다, ^^;;
고2 딸아이가 영어 말하기대회에 본선
진출을 하게 되었는데, 작성 문구가 너무 딱딱해서 자연스러움, 부드러움을 더해 주고 싶은데 실력이 더듬는 수준이라
디피 고수님들께 삼가 가르침을 부탁 드려봅니다. TED 처럼 까지는 아니더라도
어떻게 더하고 고쳐야 좀 더 자연스러울지요,



If someone tells you to think about the effects of human activity on the Earth, most people are probably the first to think about the rise in global temperatures caused by humans and think that human activity has had a negative impact on the planet. But I'm looking at human activities from a different perspective than they are. I think the Earth is the best gift given to humans. Therefore, I think it is our duty to make the Earth a better place to live so that as many people as possible live happily. Let's think about human activities, focusing on "human efforts to develop technology." For example, I think the development of robot technology has had a tremendous impact on our human lives. Not only are disasters like earthquakes but also the lives of more people at the site of nuclear accidents that are extremely difficult for humans to access. In other words, our technology can even save people. Another example is the technology of giving happy lives to even those who are socially marginalized and restricted from their activities, which is why it helps those who have been a little more difficult to socialize and work freely. For example, let's take a look at what I personally thought was the most impressive "driving system for the blind." Many people thought it was naturally impossible for blind people to pull their cars out on the road. However, in fact, Professor Dennis Hong has developed driving skills for the blind, and I think if we develop this a little bit more, we will be able to live a happier life for the blind. Another example is the technology applied to improve quality of life and fight poverty, mainly in consideration of cultural, political and environmental aspects of developing countries. Especially in Africa, there are so many people who live without even a basic life, and I think the right technology is a little bit of a help to their lives. As I mentioned earlier, we don't just feel rejected by technological advances, but we think it's our job to come up with better technologies so that many people can coexist and feel happy. Lastly, I will also become the world's top 'disaster robot engineer' and work toward the desirable development of technologies that can save many people's lives in a disaster situation.


읽어주신 모든분께 감사드립니다.
멋진 주말 되셔요,
^^